英語四級寫作範文及點評

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　　讀書如交友。通過書，你可以和幾千年前的孔子、蘇格拉底交流思想，你可以與幾百年前的曹雪芹、盧梭圍爐懇談。你，和幾個偉大的靈魂交流過?

　　The Most Influential Book in My Life

　　The Story of My Life by Helen Keller is the most influential book in my life. It abounds with courage, struggle and faith throughout.① Helen Keller was once in deep despair in her childhood, but finally she decided to overcome her physical defects and live happily. Furthermore, she showed great patience in her long and hard learning period.

　　I have learned, above all, three lessons from her story.② First, she taught me that often the road to success is to face hardships bravely. Maybe you are born under an ill star yet you can stand a better chance than others. It is therefore important that you screw up your courage when courage is needed. Second, the impairment of part of her senses did not prevent her from learning: on the contrary, she had made continual efforts to go deeper into the realm of knowledge, and her perseverance had thus helped her overcome many handicaps. Third, she advised that we should make the most of our sense organs as if we would lose them soon because this way we would observe the world more carefully than ever before.③

　　The book is inspiring in that it is one brimming over with the unbending will of a gallant woman beset with seemingly insurmountable difficulties.④I hope I can be as courageous as she.

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　　行文點評

　　文章第一句直接切入主題：The Story of My Life by Helen Keller is the most influential book in my life。接下來，對書和主人公進行了簡要介紹。第二段從三個方面具體說明該書對作者的影響和啟示。三個副詞first、second、third之後，分別從面對困難、堅忍不拔、和珍惜我們的感官三個方面闡述了這本書對讀者的影響。最後一段進行概括性說明。

　　文章字斟句酌，第一段運用abound with這個固定搭配指出作者認為這本書對其影響最大的原因，即courage, struggle and faith。行文過渡自然，第一段中用furthermore進行第二點補充，實現了句與句之間的銜接，豐富了內容，保證了全文的連貫性。結尾處as... as的運用，與首段主題句相互照應，深化了主題，為短文畫上了圓滿的句號。

　　好文妙譯

　　對我一生影響最大的書

　　海倫·凱勒所著的《我生活的故事》是對我一生影響最大的一本書。此書全篇充滿了勇氣，奮鬥和信仰。海倫·凱勒童年時曾經一度十分消沉，但是最後她決定克服自己生理上的缺陷快樂地生活。並且她還充滿耐心地完成了漫長而艱難的學習過程。

　　最重要的是，從她的經歷中，我領悟到了三個道理。首先，她教給我通往成功之路的真諦即要經常勇敢地面對艱難困苦。或許你一生下來身體就有缺陷，但是你依然可以獲得比別人更好的機會。因此重要的是在需要勇氣時鼓起自己的勇氣。第二，她感官上的某些缺陷並沒有阻止她學習，相反，她卻持之以恆努力鑽研知識，正是這種堅韌不拔的精神幫助她克服了很多障礙。第三，她建議我們應該充分利用我們的感官，就好像我們馬上就要失去他們一樣，因為這樣我們就會比以前更仔細地觀察這個世界。

　　這本書催人奮進，全篇洋溢著一個勇敢的女人在被一些看似不可能克服的困難困擾時所表現出來的不屈的精神。希望我也可以和她一樣的勇敢。

　　詞彙斟酌

　　?under an ill star 生來不幸

　　?impairment n. 損害, 損傷

　　?brim v. 充滿，溢位

　　?gallant a. 英勇的

　　?insurmountable a.不能克服的

　　佳句臨摹

　　①【註釋】abound with充滿

　　【臨摹】The region abounds with rain all the year around.那個地區終年多雨。

　　②【註釋】above all首先，最重要的是

　　【臨摹】I should like to rent a house - modern, comfortable and above all in a quiet location.我想租一幢房子——要求裝置現代化、舒適，尤其是地段要清淨。