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電腦科技的發展體現在社會生活的方方面面，教育作為創造智慧的第一生產線也受到了這種普遍趨勢的影響。膝上型電腦已經悄悄進軍大學校園。
範文:Laptops Enter into Campus
Laptop computers are popular all over the world. People use them everywhere. They connect people to their work place. In the United States today, laptops also connect students to their classrooms.
Westlake College in Virginia will start a laptop computer program allowing students to study schoolwork anywhere they want. Within five years, each of the 1500 students at the college will receive a laptop. The laptops are a part of a $10 million computer program at Westlake. Students with laptops will also have access to the Internet.① In addition, they will be able to use e-mail to “speak” with their teachers, classmates, or families.② However, the most important part of the program is that students will be able to use computers without going to computer labs. They can work with it anywhere they like!
Because of the many changes in computer technology, laptop use in higher education is workable. As laptops become more powerful, they become more similar to desktop computers. In addition, portable computers can connect students to not only the Internet, but also libraries and other resources. State higher education officials are studying how laptops can help students.
At Westlake College, more than 60 percent of the staff uses the computers. The laptops will allow all teachers to use computers in their lessons. As one Westlake teacher said, “Here we are in the middle of Virginia and we’re giving students a window on the world. They can see everything and do everything.”
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本文結構簡明：理論+例項+理論+例項。首段首句直接點題，從而引出論點。隨後非常自然地引出 膝上型電腦在美國的發展，為第二段有關韋斯特萊克大學的例項埋下了伏筆。第二段通過對韋斯特萊克大學的膝上型電腦計劃的具體解析，闡明瞭膝上型電腦在學生學習中的重要作用。之後又在第三段中提出膝上型電腦在高等教育中應用的可行性。第四段再舉例項並總結收攏全文。
本文語言平實，思路清晰，注重理論與實際相結合，有理有據，列舉數字，引用例證等都增加了文章說服力，特別是最後一句引用一名老師的話，既水到渠成，又首尾呼應。
好文妙譯
筆記本進軍校園
膝上型電腦在全世界都很流行。隨處都可見人們在使用它。它們將人和工作地點連線到一起。今天在美國，筆記本甚至將學生和教室連線了起來。
弗吉尼亞州的韋斯特萊克大學將要開始一項膝上型電腦計劃，讓學生能夠在任意地方學習。五年之內，學校將有1500名學生每人得到一部膝上型電腦。這些電腦是韋斯特萊克大學斥資一千萬美元實施的電腦計劃的一部分。得到膝上型電腦的同學將有權使用網際網路。另外，他們還能通過***同老師、同學甚至家人進行“交談”。但是，該計劃最重要的部分就是：學生不用去機房就能用上電腦。他們可以在自己喜歡的任何地方使用它!
電腦科技的變化發展使得膝上型電腦在高等教育中的應用成為可能。筆記本的功能變得很強大，幾乎和桌上型電腦無異。而且，行動式電腦不僅能上網，還可以把學生同 圖書館等其它資源聯絡到一起。國家主管高等教育的官員們正在研究如何使膝上型電腦更好地幫助學生學習。
在韋斯特萊克大學，60%以上的教職員工使用電腦。膝上型電腦使得所有教師在教學中使用電腦成為可能。就像一名韋斯特萊克的老師說的：“我們位於弗吉尼亞的中心。我們為學生開啟一扇面向世界的窗子。他們能看到一切，做到一切。”
詞彙斟酌
?laptop n. 膝上型電腦，行動式電腦，膝上型電腦
?workable a. 可使用的
?desktop n. 桌上型電腦
?portable a. 手提的，便攜的
佳句臨摹
①【註釋】have access to有權使用
【臨摹】Citizens may have free access to the library.市民可以自由使用圖書館。
②【註釋】in addition另外，除此之外
【臨摹】In addition, intelligence also depends on an adequate diet, a good education and a decent home environment.另外,智力的高低還取決於充夠的營養、優秀的教育和良好的家庭環境。
思如泉湧
Computers and scientific tools should not replace school education.計算機和科學工具不應取代學校教育。
Modern technology makes life more convenient; tools are the milestones of the technology as well as human being’s progress.現代科技使生活更加便捷;工具是科技進步和人類進步的里程碑。