高考英語滿分作文點評賞析

  賞析幾篇高考中滿分的英語作文,看名師點評它們的出色之處。下面是小編給大家整理的,供大家參閱!

  全國卷II

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  一家賓館新開業,為吸引外國賓客,希望在網際網路上進行宣傳。請你用英語為其 寫一篇文字介紹。主要內容包括:

  1.地點:距白山***處500米;

  2.房間及價格:單人間***共20間***,100元/天;雙人間***共15間***,150元/天;熱水淋浴;

  3.餐飲:餐廳***中、西餐***,咖啡廳***茶、咖啡***;

  4.游泳池:全天免費開放;

  5.歡迎預定。

  注意:1.詞數100左右,開頭語已為你寫好;2.可適當增加細節,以使行文連貫。

  Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!

  Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.

  500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides single?person room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double? person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!

  Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.

  【名師點評】

  本文開門見山,首先點明瞭主旨。本文最大的特點是應用了很多比較複雜的句式,使文章比較出彩。開頭使用了獨立結構交代賓館位置。which引導的非限制性定語從句的使用也很正確。總地來說,文章句式精煉,是篇不錯的滿分作文。

  積累卡片英漢互譯

  好詞 1. provide v.提供 2. convenience n.便利

  好句All these services can bring great convenience to you and are

  very enjoyable.所有這些服務都會給你帶來便利,並且非常的愉快。

  評析:bring great convenience,帶來便利。

  俺安徽

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  假如你是李華,美國一所友好學校準備與你們學校共同創辦一份中學生英文刊物,該校格林先生來信詢問有關情況。請你給她寫封回信,假如你是李華,美國一所友好學校準備與你們學校共同創辦一份中學生英文刊物,該校格林先生來信詢問有關情況。請你給她寫封回信,主要內容如下:

  1、表示贊成。

  2、提出你喜歡的欄目。

  3、簡要說明理由。

  注意:

  1. 詞數100左右。

  2. 新的開頭和結尾已為你寫好。

  3. 適當增加細節,以使行文連貫。

  4. 參考欄目:欄目—column

  Dear Mr. Green,

  I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. That sounds great! And I definitely agree with you on that.

  Some of the columns which you mentioned in the letter are really my cup of tea. Say, “culture express” gives us a better understanding of the world. Since people from different parts of the world have different values, it’s necessary to learn from each other. This will offer a wonderful chance. Apart from that, “blurt out” is pretty good for Chinese students to learn English idioms and improve oral English. Last but not least, “entertainment” is so cool! The popular singers, actors and celebrities are so catchy and attractive that you absolutely can’t miss it! Teenagers are just fond of the trendy things.

  Well, I can’t list more. I really can’t wait to read that magazine!

  Yours faithfully,

  Li Hua

  【名師點評】

  這是一篇滿分作文。由於這篇作文的出現,導致了安徽省今年的英語作文分數普遍偏低。仔細分析了這篇文章,寫的的確是好,很地道的美式英語,一些詞語的大膽使用,讓人不得不猜測此人或者是家人可能有過國外生活的經歷,否則這麼地道標準的英語,可不是一朝一夕所能寫出來的。

  比如說:my cup of tea, apart from that, oral English, last but not least, celebrities, catchy和trendy的大膽運用,list, can't wait to 簡直是perfect! 況且文章中沒有一個錯誤,不管是書寫還是語法。英語能夠學到這種程度,不可謂不讓人佩服。

  江蘇

  【試題回放】2007年4月29日上午10點到11點,全國億萬學生陽光體育活動在各地大中小學校同時進行,江蘇省1,100萬學生積極參與了這項活動。

  教育部倡導學生:

  每天鍛鍊一小時

  健康工作五十年

  幸福生活一輩子

  請你根據以上提示,用英語準備一份發言稿,向同學們講述一下陽光體育活動的有關情況,並就高三學生是否需要每天花一小時鍛鍊,談談你的看法及理由。

  注意:

  1、發言稿應包括以上所有資訊,要有適當發揮。

  2、詞數:120左右。發言稿的開頭和結尾已經寫好,不計入總詞數。

  3、參考詞彙:陽光體育活動——a national student sports program;

  教育部——the Ministry of Education

  Good afternoon, everyone,

  The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10:00a.m.~11:00a.m.on April 29,2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.

  The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.

  In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!

  Thank you!

  【名師點評】

  本文的結構十分明晰,同時句式使用得熟練而準確。本文分為三段,前兩段敘述,後一段發表觀點,典型的作文結構。在句式使用上,作者用法多樣,使用了獨立結構和虛擬語氣,十分出彩。複雜的句式是本文的特點之一。

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  好詞1.wage v.發動2.aim v.瞄準3. advocate v.提倡

  好句1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.

  教育部提倡我們每天做一個小時的運動,能夠健康地活50年。

  評析:advocate,其後接虛擬語氣,可以省略情態動詞。

  2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records.

  如果我們不進行運動,我們的學習成績就不會很好。

  評析:虛擬語氣。

  

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