高考英語滿分作文賞析

　　對於英語作文的賞析，會讓你收穫新的知識。下面是小編網路整理的以供大家學習。

　　一

　　Mrs. Wilson,

　　I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　[名師點評]

　　本文屬於提綱式要點作文，是學生比較熟悉的題材，體現了英語學習應該注意實用性，生活型的原則。行文人稱、時態運用恰當、準確，各個要點間邏輯連貫，行文通順。提綱類書面表達不是簡單的逐條翻譯，而是將所給的幾個要點合理的組成比較通順的語句，因此要仔細組織語言，合理安排結構。在語言方面，要特別注意簡潔明瞭，開頭要開門見山。

　　二

　　Dear Sir/Madam,

　　Greetings from China!

　　I’m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. I’ve been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I’ve been watching her grow on your website,. Now she’s going to be three. I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

　　By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.

　　Yours truly,

　　Li Hua

　　【名師點評】本文寫作的內容要點如下：

　　1.自我介紹;2.資訊來源;3.祝賀生日;4.感謝照顧;5.索取照片;6.合適的結尾。

　　這封信格式正確，行文規範，描述有條不紊，稱呼、正文中的開頭及結尾、結束語均表達到位。文章行文活潑，感情真摯，語言表述準確，洋溢著作者因大熊貓得到精心照顧而對美方人員的感激之情，以及希望自己願望成真，得到照片的希冀之情。長短句運用合理，結合了簡單句和複合句，流暢自然，不露痕跡，的確是一篇佳作。

　　積累卡片英漢互譯

　　好詞1.delighted adj.欣喜的，快樂的2.express v.表達 3.give birth to v.產生，生育

　　好句I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

　　我祝福它生日快樂並且對你們的辛勤工作表達我的感激之情，正是你們的努力工作讓蘇琳和它的父母在美國過著幸福和健康的生活。

　　三

　　Dear Sir，

　　I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didn’t ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.

　　Thank you for your consideration.

　　Sincerely yours,

　　Bu Manyi

　　【名師點評】

　　本文內容要點齊全，語言豐富，結構合理，如頭兩句說明了購買手機後發現故障的情況，中間部分說明了無法維修而必須讓公司更換手機的原委，最後明確提出自己的要求，明白流暢，將題目所提出的要點全部表達清楚，較好的完成了任務。全文以一般過去時為基調，結合主動語態與被動語態，並使用了so, but, therefore 等連線詞，使文章結構完整嚴密。固定短語，如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用，使文章的語言顯得地道而精煉。

　　積累卡片英漢互譯

　　好詞1. disappointment n.失望 2.desperate adj.絕望的 3. consideration n.體諒

　　好句To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.

　　令我失望的是，他說因為在中國是新款手機，所以沒有配件來修理。

　　評析：複雜句的組織; to my disappointment, 常用短語。

　　四

　　Good afternoon, everyone,

　　The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10：00a.m.~11:00a.m.on April 29，2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.

　　The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.

　　In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!

　　Thank you!

　　【名師點評】

　　本文的結構十分明晰，同時句式使用得熟練而準確。本文分為三段，前兩段敘述，後一段發表觀點，典型的作文結構。在句式使用上，作者用法多樣，使用了獨立結構和虛擬語氣，十分出彩。複雜的句式是本文的特點之一。

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　　好詞1.wage v.發動2.aim v.瞄準3. advocate v.提倡

　　好句1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.

　　教育部提倡我們每天做一個小時的運動，能夠健康地活50年。

　　評析：advocate，其後接虛擬語氣，可以省略情態動詞。

　　2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records.

　　如果我們不進行運動，我們的學習成績就不會很好。