關於宿舍安全的英語作文
關於宿舍安全的英語作文
題目:On Dormitory Security
寫作要求
Dormitories on campus were reported to be broken into and burglaries happened regularly.
What should both students and universities do to reduce this kind of crime?
Write on Answer Sheet Two a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:
On Dormitory Security
You are to write in three parts.
In the rst part, state speci cally what your opinion is.
In the second part, provide one or two reasons to support your idea OR describe your idea.
In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.
Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriatenes. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.
審題思路
本題是一道問題解決/建議型的題目,一般建議型題目的寫法是複述題幹內容 ,直截了當提出自己的建議, 然後擺事實講道理說明該建議有什麼好處 ,最後把文章引入一個自然的總結段中即可。但是根據這個題目的.題幹,重點不是用理由來支援某個建議,而是詳述該建議是什麼,即分小點說明學校和學生應該分別做些什麼。
範文賞析
On Dormitory Security
It is reported that recently in quite a few universities, dormitories on campus have been broken into and burglaries have happened every now and then. In fact, students have complained a lot that burglaries are like nightmares in their college years. I think it’s high time that both students and universities did something to reduce and eliminate this kind of crime.
引言部分:作者先說明有報道說最近寢室遭竊的現象很多,困擾著學生們,然後提出學生和學校都應採取措施。
On the one hand, there are some measures which universities can take. First, universities should have all the dormitory doors and windows checked, find out and repair the broken ones so that thieves cannot go in easily. Second, the number of university security staff should be increased. Security personnel should patrol on campus and cross-question any suspicious person.
On the other hand, students should also do something to protect their belongings. First, when they leave their dormitories, they should keep doors and windows locked to keep out sneak10 thieves.Second, students should lock their valuables11 up in lockers12. In this way, they can reduce the risks of burglaries happening.
主體部分:作者分兩方面來說,並在每方面下面又分了幾個小點,這樣一則可以豐富內容,二則使整篇文章邏輯清晰,銜接緊湊,成為一個完整的整體。
In one word, both students and universities should do something to reduce burglaries in dormitories. And only in a safe dormitory can a student live and study happily.
總結部分:作者用in one word自然而然地對上文進行了總結,並進一步說明只有寢室安全才能讓學生生活和學習得更開心。
亮點回放
1. be broken into: “被闖入”,常用於指房子有竊賊闖入。
2. every now and then: “時而,不時” ;近義詞有every now and again ,every so often, more often than not等 。
3. nightmare: “噩夢,使人特別痛苦的事情或經歷”。
4. it s high time that: “該做某事的時候到了” ;如果在time前面有high ,the very等詞 ,那麼從句中要使用過去時。
5.eliminate: “除去,消除” ;這裡還可以使用get rid of,root out ,wipe out ,weed out等來表示 同一意思。
6. personnel: “職員” ;作名詞 ,注意personnel和personal(個人的)的區別。
7. patrol: “巡邏 ,巡查”。
8. cross-question: “盤問,審問” ;該詞 的使用體現了作者詞彙量的豐富和用詞的精到。
9. suspicious: “可疑的,多疑的” ;也可以使用doubtable和questionable來代替 。
10. sneak : 常用作動詞,表示 “偷偷摸摸做/走”,此處用作形容詞,表示“出其不意的,暗中進行的”。
11. valuables: valuable常用作形容詞 ,表示 “貴重的” ;當用作名詞且為複數時 ,表示 “貴重物品”。
12. locker: “更衣箱,儲物櫃” ;該詞用得非常到位 。